It is clear that the most significant factor for people’s happiness is achievement at work in both age groups, which accounts for around 30% of the whole. Also, undertaking hobbies is the second biggest reason that makes people feel happy the most (22% for people under 30, 24% for people over 30).
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30才以上では、3番目にfinancial securityその次に、being with family
30才以下では、3番目にgood appearanceその次にtravelling
For individuals aged over 30, the ratio of financial security(20%) is followed by being with family with 6% less than that of financial security. Conversely, younger people find their contentment in having a good appearance, which comprises of 18%. Following this, the percentage of travelling is 15% while this factor does not appear on the other graph(over 30 people). Finally, people who are over 30 tend to feel happy about financial status and relationships, while for young people, appearance and travelling are more appealing.
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The aforementioned charts illustrate the percentage of factors that make people happiest depending on their respective age groups.
It is clear that the most significant factor for people’s happiness is achievement at work in both age groups, which accounts for around 30% of the whole. Also, undertaking hobbies is the second biggest reason that makes people feel happy the most (22% for people under 30, 24% for people over 30).
For individuals aged over 30, the ratio of financial security(20%) is followed by being with family with 6% less than that of financial security. Conversely, younger people find their contentment in having a good appearance, which comprises of 18%. Following this, the percentage of travelling is 15% while this factor does not appear on the other graph(over 30 people). Finally, people who are over 30 tend to feel happy about financial status and relationships, while for young people, appearance and travelling are more appealing.